Bring Jessie back.anonymous readerReport 2011-01-15 09:56:15I HOPE ITS NOT OVER KEEP GOING THEIR COULD BE GREAT FUN BETWEEN THENbstmanReport 2010-12-05 22:10:50best story line here! Blowjob sex 12 comments«123»anonymous readerReport 2011-05-26 01:18:29Just read the entire series. Helpful hints:
Spend a little more time developing the story and character’s own backstory, take longer between posting the stories if necessaryn
Don’t be afraid to get more detailed
And finally, your first story had a lot of descriptors and backstory, I think you need to spend more timedeveloping Jessie’s character and past. keep it going!!!«123» Helpful hints:
Spend a little more time developing the story and character’s own backstory, take longer between posting the stories if necessaryn
Don’t be afraid to get more detailed
And finally, your first story had a lot of descriptors and backstory, I think you need to spend more timedeveloping Jessie’s character and past.
