10 comments«12»READERReport 2006-10-12 22:57:10Now what is it about a good slow fuck between consenting teens that just sounds like it is O.K. The story also needs more visuals, that is why people get bored with the story. Blowjob sex You put a lot of effort into a story, make it count. Glad it was special for you both. 1/10READERReport 2005-09-07 09:13:23Hannah, you have a pretty good geasp of the language but the inconsistancies hurt the story. Glad it was special for you both. No blow job. The story also needs more visuals, that is why people get bored with the story. That’s all you needed to say. Also, you need to break the paragraph each time you add dialogue or change speakers. No ass fuck. If they had been kissing before this weekend and in the park, than why do they act surprised at the chemistry? The story also needs more visuals, that is why people get bored with the story.
