I wish you luck in your future attempts at writing :)anonymous readerReport 2012-08-21 20:56:58no begining a rush to sex and no end equal a WASTE OF TIME do a total rewrite and use a good editor.chance52Report 2012-07-10 18:52:17much like everyone else said, you’re story does need some build up to it. tell us that she looks up into his clear blue eyes, or that he brushes her long blond hair away from her face while she’s blowing him… Blowjob sex 10 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-10-28 09:13:31I agree it dose has potenial a lot indeed the locatipn is a bit hard to imagine but keep going my love.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-14 19:26:13i like when he said put your hand in your clit while i fuck u bitchanonymous readerReport 2013-01-31 19:44:21It has potential, though you weren’t very descriptive in your language. With training we can learn to stay hard even after we cum, and keep it that way for a while, some even long enough for them to get “naturally” hard again.
